Cpt. Smurf

Having gone over and over this book many multiple times in preparation for our English Lit. exam last year, I'm thoroughly sick of it, and its many references to the ...

I'll have to read that sometime. Your description of him and his writing style makes me think of Dickens. Very innovtive to the point where the general public can't take ...

I really liked this. Short, sweet, effective. I love your use of imagery, and I think it's ideal as a prologue. No amount of tears can shift this image, though ...

Hi! As I'm attempting a bit of a critiquing spree, I decided to answer your plea for a critique. Thus, on with the ripping apart! I quite liked this, as ...

Just a quick tip - when posting in the literary forums, try not to post a huge chunk of your story in one go. This puts people off hugely. Also, ...

Hello. My name's Kyle, and I'll be your reviewer for today :wink: This was interesting. I think it has potential, but there's a lot to improve on, such as your ...

Well, here I go again. I'm glad you put this up - has been a long wait! Chapter Three I enjoyed this - some good dialogue, character development, description, all ...

OK, I've just started reading Eldest (it's some free thing on the internet - no way would I pay to read this drivel) and in the very first paragraph I ...

Although I disagree that these are considered children's books. You don't call Jurassic Park a children's book just because it has dinosaurs in it, and you don't call His Dark ...

Hello Twitters. Well, I promised I'd read Scarab, which I did, though only half of it. Time constraints (and a shameful habit of losing things) are a curse. Anywho, I ...

Hello again! I see that this is a much shorter post than your previous one, and so therefore easier for me to critique. So that's good! A word of advice, ...

Hi! I see you haven't been here long, so welcome to YWS! I did read the whole thing (let's face it, what good would I be if I didn't?), and ...

Hi! Firstly, I like this. It's very well laid out, the spelling and punctuation is spot-on (bar a few missing or changeable words- nothing big) and the story itself is ...

Wow, you really love Harry Potter and the Inheritance series don't you? well i got some good news and some bad news for you christopher paolini is not going to ...

I thought this was very well written, and subtly funny, although I think the satire could have been explored more. But, yeah, very well written. I also agree with you ...